He and I’ve been around a lot. We’ve eroded the city’s roads looking for so many things. But we were also looking for some warmth in each of us. For a place where we know we’d reside once we were separated.
Today we had a long day. Funny how we were healthy; but we were beginning to get tired. Tired of the heightened depression of parting, that time was soon going to become a tragedy. My very soul has been shivering at the thought of him not being there in my daily days. He was unable to imagine the emptiness of a house without my bubbling laughter. How would we survive this?
We’ve been hungrily taking in whatever we can..loading each moment with as much of us as possible. I can feel every bit of me trickling into him and every second of his precious time being filled with me. I’ve begun to let the silent dams of tears unfasten. They’ve drizzled onto my edgy heart and keep goading it to be happy. He has been worried and talking and thinking a lot. He is slowly realizing how important I am becoming.
We were particularly tired today. We burned our soles and decided it’s time to relax. As we warmed up to the drinks, the song played. How did the DJ know? I looked at him. The flat-screen behind me..like a soft, protective shell of light around my frame. He could see the curve of my cheeks sliding into the half-open smile. He had one arm around me and looked right into my eyes. He sang.
I felt the many births I’ve taken in our time together. I saw his whole life flashing in my mind's eye. I felt such an overwhelming feeling within me that it was a wonder I managed to remain breathing at that moment. His eyes spoke a million raindrops.
I saw him crossing that bridge and reaching out to me. I could feel him jumping that last, crucial obstacle. He spoke it all through his eyes and the gentle squeeze on my shoulder. He dipped his head slightly toward me and softly echoed the words. His eyes locked mine as had his very being intertwined with mine.
I tell you. I’m in love. For one last time.
Today we had a long day. Funny how we were healthy; but we were beginning to get tired. Tired of the heightened depression of parting, that time was soon going to become a tragedy. My very soul has been shivering at the thought of him not being there in my daily days. He was unable to imagine the emptiness of a house without my bubbling laughter. How would we survive this?
We’ve been hungrily taking in whatever we can..loading each moment with as much of us as possible. I can feel every bit of me trickling into him and every second of his precious time being filled with me. I’ve begun to let the silent dams of tears unfasten. They’ve drizzled onto my edgy heart and keep goading it to be happy. He has been worried and talking and thinking a lot. He is slowly realizing how important I am becoming.
We were particularly tired today. We burned our soles and decided it’s time to relax. As we warmed up to the drinks, the song played. How did the DJ know? I looked at him. The flat-screen behind me..like a soft, protective shell of light around my frame. He could see the curve of my cheeks sliding into the half-open smile. He had one arm around me and looked right into my eyes. He sang.
I felt the many births I’ve taken in our time together. I saw his whole life flashing in my mind's eye. I felt such an overwhelming feeling within me that it was a wonder I managed to remain breathing at that moment. His eyes spoke a million raindrops.
I saw him crossing that bridge and reaching out to me. I could feel him jumping that last, crucial obstacle. He spoke it all through his eyes and the gentle squeeze on my shoulder. He dipped his head slightly toward me and softly echoed the words. His eyes locked mine as had his very being intertwined with mine.
I tell you. I’m in love. For one last time.
22 comments:
Nooooooooooooooo...you beat me to it again...life is just not fair :(
Well articulaed as usual!
I really liked "We’ve eroded the city’s roads looking for so many things." line in the beginning. This is a very different yet simple way of looking at the experience.
And, as usual and bang on, your ending is powerful.
"I tell you. I’m in love. For one last time."
:-)
Thanks for dropping by Murmurs and leaving some kind words. New visitors are always much appreciated. I very much enjoyed "The Key". Good imagery, powerful writing. Will return soon to explore the rest of your work.
Thank you for such an elegant snapshot into a piece of a relationship. I am going through something similar right now and this really hit home for me.
Anil - Now what can I say to you? Hmm?
.:A:. - Hehe. Trust you read into the subtilities of what I wrote. I'm quite happy you noted the endings too. :)
endlessecho - Isn't it? I grinned to myself when I keyed it in.
Darrell - Thanks for dropping by too. It's nice to know that you mirror what I felt about your writing. Will keep visiting your blog. :)
Diva Drip - It's so very warming to read your comment. Hope everything works out for you!
i felt a tear begin and roll down my cheek when i read this... i felt this, but today i wish, as i read your writings, that i'd written as beautifully about those moments. You are a gifted writer. i feel so good i visited your site.
if i cud write as well as u do, i wud tell u in oh so many words but...so i only have these - beautiful, beautiful, you write oh so beautifully :-)
i agree with everyone here.. you ARE a gifted writer. the last line is very evocative.
aw!!! its so tender. these are my fav lines...
"He is slowly realizing how important I am becoming."
"I felt the many births I’ve taken in our time together."
"I tell you. I’m in love. For one last time."
FINALLY I get here and WHAT a treat! *grin* Good to know you M!
-Ph
delicate n engrossing...
First time here... Nice stuff... Loved it... N I hope to be dropping in again!!
Btw do drop in at my page as well when time and inclination permit... http://alienknight.rediffblogs.com..
Ciao
"For a place where we know we’d reside once we were separated.
I felt the many births I’ve taken in our time together.
I saw him crossing that bridge and reaching out to me."
Haunting and touching. Stirs something deep inside, a vaguely familiar feeling.
Kudos to you.
What can I say?
woo hoo. I'm happy for ya, my friend.
lovely. :-)
Non-Sensei
hey...good to get back to blogging again.Nice to read your latest entries.You had dropped by last month on my page(http://saladbowls.rediffblogs.com).Just wanted to tell you i have shifted add and now if you get the time do visit(http://lapicide.rediffblogs.com).I shall be shifting my old stuff here.Thanks for your comment.Appreciated the fact that you are interested in my style:)
perspective - Oh. You make me smile! Thank you so much for saying what you said. I'm glad you liked my writing and choose to visit again. :)
dewdrop - Thanks! You write really well yourself. Nice to have you around here, though!
vivek m - The last line, indeed, was the..punch line, if it may be called so. Do visit again and thank you. :)
AmitKen - Made me read what I wrote by quoting, eh. Good to know you liked those lines in particular.
Ph - Ah. Finally. It's a great honor. And more than that to know you too! :))
Dattatraya - I will most definitely visit your blog. Thanks for leaving the link and comment. Hope you'd keep visiting.
Prat - Your comment made me smile one of my quiet, beaming smile! Thank you for saying such wonderful things. *smiles yet again!*
Non-Sensei - Thanks, NS. I'm happy that you're happy for me. Hehe. Keep coming by.
Anon - Thanks for the link. I've already begin reading through your blog. Hope to see you around here!
Intense and powerful writing ! I could almost 'see' it all. The beauty of pain captured...
Thank you for visiting and the comment. I'll definitely be back :)
Re-reading this post, and I must say again, I really like it. What strikes me now, is that there is a possibility of a part 2. Is there? If not, are you going to give it a shot?
:-)
Pincushion - Welcome :) I'm happy to know you like what I write.
.:A:. - :) Yes, there is a part 2. But it shall come in due time and you will know it when it does happen. There's no question of whether I'm giving it a shot or not. I am.
ubermensch - Gosh, I was browsing through and realized I missed your comment. Doubt you'd read this, but thanks for what you'd said :)
"I felt the many births I’ve taken in our time together." -- very mystical. You are gooooood!!! I felt like I'm on a different plane all together when i read this piece. Each word drips with your emotions.
Nice subtle way of writing you have. Reading your posts makes me feel like sitting by a lake where the water touches my feet, cold yet pleasant, gentle yet intense, placid yet exciting, wave after wave.
thanks for dropping by and letting me know about your blog...I enjoyed what I read :)
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