Ensconced
In
Muddled thoughts,
The little
Girl
Deliberated
Death.
Reveling
In
Barred boxes,
The slighted
Woman
Intimidated
Insanity.
Impassioned
In
Curled misery,
The ancient
Lady
Mocked
Mortality.
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12 comments:
great writing.
Ancient lady ? What did that mean ?
Stranger Ken - Welcome here and I sure hope you'd come by again. I'm glad that you find what I write interesting as I do yours. :)
billy - :) Thank you and I hope to see you around.
Infatuation Junkie - 'ancient lady' is a rather elderly lady..belonging to a time we might not know of..relate to..much less belong to.
Oh .. now I get it .. now the poem dawns on me ... wow .. that was so well written ... how cud I be such a fool ... ofcourse ... lovely poem :..M..: ... beautifully written (as always ...)
this post incited a feeling of deja vu. maybe because it echoes some deep-seated part of me that contemplates the end of mortality. hmmm. words are truly powerful, aren't they? and you have a gift.
THE linking words are so strong..kinnda gives chills ..
"Deliberated
Death"
Intimidated
Insanity
"Mocked
Mortality"
love the way u handle them...brilliant:)
Hi :..m..:, long time...and I've just updated myself on your latest posts.
I agree with Blackempress--the use of these words is amazing. The girl deliberating on death supplied the woman with courage to intimidate insanity...and in turn the woman and the girl bestowed the ancient lady with arrogance to mock mortality! And look how well the ancient lady mocks it!
Also what i liked is how you move in time through the personas of the females-the girl, the woman, the ancient lady.(I think antonia speaks of it as well). What i liked about the particular way you moved--how you linked up their experience with/through the passing of time.So time functions not as a break but as a bridge.
It's really a pleasure to read your writing. I'm glad my comments help you in the way they do. Will try my best to give you exactly what I think of your posts.
Am moving on to you prose piece now...
--Ellipses M
Infatuation Junkie - Thanks, as always :)
Antonia - :) I'm honored that you think so and to be linked.
Yes, one way of looking at this poem is the passing on of the perception of death through time-frames.
transience - I've a morbid outlook..
Words are sometimes too powerful and othertimes vain. Perhaps power does that.
Blackempress - Ah. You noticed. I'm satisfied. :)
Ellipses M - Yes, been a long long time since I last heard your keen comments. I enjoy reading what you've to say.
You've given one of the things I was communicating words. :)
I like the way this moves from one phase to the other and the 'aliterations' at the end of each part. Powerful!
enembius - :) Thanks..it was something I never even noticed, to honestly tell you. Not until the comments pointed it out to me!
.:A:. - And you're back. :) Thanks. I thought the alliterations will give it a little bit of a rhythm.
wow, this is beautiful. i love the words you used. there are few of them, but you make a strong statement.
~allie~ - Thanks for coming by and
I'm glad you like this poem. I hope to see you around :)
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