Let the voices
Drown me
Tonight.
_____
Sitting across me
Is the
Dream I wish
To live.
Once
Used to warn
Me
With, shoot
Their
Invincible daggers
At
My bare
Heart.
_____
Like a hardened
Buddha
You escape
Into a
Chilly silence.
_____
If you only knew
How my
Soul
Glistens with
The
Laden sighs
Of our
Love united
Yet
Departing.
_____
Capture me in
Your
Gadgeted
Minions.
Hold me with
Your
Trembling
Feelings.
Lace me by your
Infinite
Love.
_____
You live
In me
Like a
Misty
Truth,
Like a
Faithful
Hope.
_____
Her voice
Hung
Over us
Menacingly.
I looked over at
You
Gently dressing me
With
Your wet love.
My eyes watered
In the
Pleading
Question -
Is this verity?
You clarified.
All it took
Was your
Tender tug
And my
Quick answer.
We've survived
Too much,
We'll survive
Some more.
_____
24 comments:
All it took
Was your
Tender tug
And my
Quick answer.
Oh ! so close to the heart, to the truth !
simply beautiful.
btw, have linked to you :)
i've been reading your poetry...'twas exquisite, i assure you :D great writing. hope you keep it up!
And you are back with a bang ... or several firecrackers of snippets!
Very enjoyable as usual. Really liked,
"Sitting across me
Is the
Dream I wish
To live."
and
"We've survived
Too much,
We'll survive
Some more."
Thanks for dropping by! :^) Loved the poem, both in content and layout. :^)
greetings, and thanks for your more than kind words on my blog. Not sure how you stumbled across me, but glad to see you... it gave me a chance to come here and discover your wonderful words.
If you only knew
How my
Soul
Glistens with
The
Laden sighs
Of our
Love united
Yet
Departing.
Brilliant!
Something most of us can (unfortunately) relate to.
I look forward to reading more.
Familiar style. As lovely. :)
--Ph
Hey:) thanks for dropping by on my new blog!Am glad you liked the end of the story. Your new post has the nebulous simplicity of heartfelt emotion:) Nice. Take care and keep visiting!
Pincushion - It's an honor to be linked by you. Thank you! And yes, sometimes words and verse can somehow come close to reality.
Corsarius - :) Same as yours? Thanks, it's always nice to hear someone say good things about one's writing!
.:A: - Thanks, A. I tried my best to give you a great read!
CAROLVS - Welcome here. Thanks and hope you come by again.
small squirrel - :) The pleasure of dropping by your blog is all mine. I'd stumbled across your blog through a myraid of links. Hope to see you around here!
Ph - Familiar style? :) Glad to know you think it lovely nevertheless!
Anon - Interesting way to look upon my post. Although, I must confess. I don't quite remember your link..for I visit so many! My apologies.
Lady :..M..: I loved your poetry, and I usually don't care much for poetry. Your words are simple yet poignant, very touching, emotional. The poems reminded me of siddharth Dhanvant Shangvi's prose in his debut novel "The Last Song of Dusk". From now on, will be a regular reader of your words. :)
I looked over at
You
Gently dressing me
With
Your wet love.
Very, very sensuous!
Emotions have beocome slave to your writings. Wonderfull!!
"We've survived
Too much,
We'll survive
Some more."
that was WoW!!
Finally found my way here, M! And I'm glad I did so, didn't know what I was missing!
I'll just echo what everyone else is saying. I really liked these lines:
We've survived
Too much,
We'll survive
Some more.
Nicely done!
Sitting across me
Is the
Dream I wish
To live.
:)
How much more can those words echo what I'm feeling!
Like a hardened
Buddha
You escape
Into a
Chilly silence.picturesque elegant simplicity;
cheers!
In reply: Not even for a minute did i think that your writings were soppy. They are not "you are sweet, I'm sweet" kind of schmaltz. They are dark and mystical. :)
Urvashi - I've really begun smiling a great deal ever since I read your comment. Coming from you, this is an honor for me. Makes me happy to know that you like what I write. :) Thanks for the comments.
enembius - Ah. So you have arrived. Thanks for your kind comment and I hope to see you around here!
AmitKen - I only try. :) I'm happy to know you too liked that verse. I found it equally well written!
SPECKLED_BAND - Welcome! You've found me. At last. Truly a great honor that you find my writing good. I'll strive not to disappoint ;)
Ariel - :) Yes, I thought it a powerful verse too. Thank you for coming by!
Sita - Warm welcome to you. I'm glad I was able to mirror some of what you felt. :) Hope to see you around here!
Wow ... beautiful poem ... been here for the first time .. and now I'll love to read ur previous posts too ...
The poem was really well written ... the one word lines of the poems .. I wanted to write like this on my blog the other day .. but like I couldn't ...
Anyways .. why don't u shift to haloscan ?? It is much better than this blogspot comments ...
Your blog becomes one of my favorites ... your writing is awsome ...
Awesome writing...thanks for ur apprecation on mine..u showed me a path to a talented writer...
will keep comin
Infatuation Junkie - Thanks for coming by and adding me. I'm sticking by this regular commenting than haloscan coz I like the way I can see a length of comments infront of me rather than it all forced into a box. Something to do with my mind-set, I guess!
Blackempress - :) I'm glad you say that. I feel the same way about your writing. I'll be coming by your blog often too. See you around!
Amazing words straight from the heart.
Madhu Dharma - Thank you for saying so. Welcome and hope to see you around here.
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