Friday, March 18, 2005

When Two Needed Three.

Her story unwove itself. Like dry petals it fell open gently. It was a dramatic point, except without any ripple in its periphery. She looked at her with utter disappointment, with that animal anger. She wanted to break through this barrier and explain herself. One last time.

One last time,
Thought she,
In the midst of
This awful
Symphony
Of disharmony
And
Discord..


Hear me once.

***

She wanted to scream till her voice resonated in some depth. She only stared back; the inner recesses of her soul were quaking with rage. It was the singular moment when anger menacingly unfroze. Like a thawing, radiant iceberg. Her helplessness unveiled itself. Hear me once.

Hear me once,
Thought she,
Despite the
Thrashing
Waterfalls
Of
Shame and
Guilt..

It's eroding.

***

It's eroding. The culmination happened. Like a burst of boiling firecrackers. It was a garland of colors from a heart's final eruption. She choked over the million misunderstandings, explanations and pointless independence. She wanted to crack open and count the aberrations and wounds. I've lost.

I've lost,
Her eyes spoke,
After
Scrambling for
Some ground
To call my own
But
Now
With sawdust
In my hands..

I'm going.

***

I'm going. The ashes of a wasted emotions lay..stuck. Like slow steam it curls around her throat torturing to clutch longer. It was the slow drumming of useless words hitting against the empty vessel of time. She sat muted, blankly looking at the broken glass pieces of hurt form unknown patterns. She saw the trespasses play themselves as time thawed. I've slipped.

I've slipped,
Her eyes spoke,
Away
Into an abyss
I had found
During careless
Words
Were hurled
Like playthings
For isolated
Prisoners..

The door’s shut.

***

19 comments:

bismuth said...

i am so envious. you describe my memories better than my own words.

. : A : . said...

Wow! This was amazing. This was powerfully written and strong on emotions.

I like the way the story weaves through the various phases interspersed with poems.

Few lines that I really liked,

"It was a dramatic point, except without any ripple in its periphery.

"It was the singular moment when anger menacingly unfroze."

"She choked over the million misunderstandings, explanations and pointless independence."

"It was the slow drumming of useless words hitting against the empty vessel of time."

BlackEmpress said...

Well described moments...another hit!

The rhythm resembled that of a song.The way u the lst meaninful sentence was carefully intricated into the next to give more detail.

so did two ever find 3?

Keep BLogging!

livinghigh said...

the trepidation, the onrush, the chill, the deflation, the sadness and the petal-memories. intricately styled, intricately appreciated. (I shall stop being arty now). ;-) nice piece.

The Bard said...

wrapped wid emotions!

my fav line - "After Scrambling for
Some ground To call my own But Now
With sawdust In my hands.."

Anonymous said...

It's brilliant the way you
weave it all together, gathering layers over a circle...constructing with colours,prose,poems and an organic rhythm which flows through it all without loosening up.Reminds me of water rushing over stones
and the taut rhythm it carries through from the mountains...fresh,clear water...

--Ellipses M

{illyria} said...

this is like the story of my life. leaving your space, and then, returning, has never been more poetic than it is now. i've missed your words.

Vivek M said...

beautiful, i have enjoyed every word you have written...

Unknown said...

Beautiful is all i can say...

musik-addikt said...

this is beautiful, and amazing like my memories, yet you ahve wriiten them in a way i would've never thought

S.L. Corsua said...

*gasp* i feel like i just watched a ballet performance. bravo, bravo! *standing ovation*

Anonymous said...

And the pebbles strike back. Hahahaha...
You should have called yourself fireballs.

:..M..: said...

bismuth - You're making me smile now!!

.:A:. - Thank you, A. :) I know not what else to say.

Jax - Does it not..

Blackempress - Thanks for the encouragement. You did notice a few of the more intricate details to this post.
No. Three didn't come in time.

livinghigh - You have arrived. Welcome and I'd love to see you around here.
Thanks for the arty comment, we can try different styles each time :))

la devil - Welcome and thank you. I'm glad you found those lines to stand out, they are quite sad.

Ellipses M - *grin* I absolutely love the way you describe my posts. They make me look at them differently sometimes.

transience - That was beautiful, what you said. :)

vivek m - Thanks.

perspective - A long time since you've stepped into these spaces. Glad you liked this post.

_brydee_ - Thanks and I do hope to see you around here. We all have a unique way of describing and fabricating.

the_soulless - *grin* Thank you..that made me blush!!

Thud and Blunder - Lol! When I read this comment, I was giggling and laughing for quite some time! Hehe..

Adrian Neibauer said...

I like:

She choked over the million misunderstandings, explanations and pointless independence. She wanted to crack open and count the aberrations and wounds. I've lost.

You have a very unique style of writing. The mixture of prose and poetry fits nicely together when otherwise it would not. You are succient and intelligent in your writing. Well done.

:..M..: said...

stan laurel - Thank you very much. I was so happy to read what you'd written. :)

aa said...

Your words made me see what eyes alone could not possibly comprehend.

Atheistbishop said...

I am sad that it din't work out.

A powerful release does more bad than good. Sometimes.

Anonymous said...

damn.
So much I'd like to say, so little I can.
:-)

Non-Sensei

:..M..: said...

Free Spirit - It is for the heart. The heart alone.

Atheistbishop - 'Sometimes' being the keyword. Like in Shrek II - it's better out than in!

Non-Sensei - If you've said that..I'll consider it a big honor. For I know how sparsely these words are used :)